another smile!
as I wade through the weeds
feet entangle breath shortens
saline waters fills my nostrils
salt sits on eyelids
hands cracking after too much of soaking
heart explores length breadth and depth
of oceans I have jumped in
searching for those lost treasures
with breaking speed
my hands collect
everything they stumble upon
rustic hearts, shining pearls
lustrous sapphires, sunlit jades
someone’s long lost desires
another one’s stolen and then thrown away dreams
gathering all I run deeper
losing track of time
I feel faint and I know
that now I have to go
with my bag full of life
keeping tight I do climb
shaft of water with eyes wide
joy in my heart knows no bounds
all my limbs are full of flight
reaching shores I open my bag
pour it down on the floor
one by one all come out
bright lights fill all corners
light has turned everything
blinding bright sunlit shine
just then my heart skips many beats all at a time
I rummage through lustreless waste
with drowning heart drooping eyes
with shooting pain in my breast
my hands throw everything around
my soul cries out aloud
why have you left my treasure behind?
Why you come with empty hands each time?
Ocean’s water stays calm stays aloof
do not respond
ocean’s depths walk up
begins to sail on its waves
one by one I ask those
looking at me they all smile!
…Gud Morning Dear Pritts…although this may sound like a sexist bias…but you are one amongst the very few of your kind … a woman who never cease to amaze with her clarity of thoughts and conclusiveness of vision…
…the use of the metaphor for explaining the jaded journey that even collecting the jades can’t paint picture differently…is just awe inspiring …
…you have made us develop the affinity even with the salt sitting on the eyelids…where all our effort goes out for hunting the lost treasure and it is only after having burnt our fingers that we realise that it was all in vain looking for lost desires which kept compelling us to move deeper still into the froth to the marshy abyss where we cant put even put our foot firmly…
that is very true that although we ultimately succeed in collecting the lustrous pearls, sapphires and jade but it is subsequently that we get to appreciate that it were actually lustreless waste…and the hapless lives have nothing else left by then …other than repenting upon the foolery…
…and this indulgence surprises the nature that we don’t understand nature of things that leaves the ocean smiling at the irony of our living …
…when one understands then only one can appreciate…jades, its lustreless essence…your writings or its magnificence …very interesting indeed Dear Pritts…have a smiley day with the brightness all around… all abound 🙂
thanks very much.. Prateek for this beautiful review.
well…. shud i say dearie what u have written is most precious and beautiful.. uncomparable.. but the review i read from Mr. Prateek is not less amazing than that…. which one shud i say the best.. let me take a chance to congratulate both of u… 🙂
As allways… Excellent …. Pritpal… You Always thinks for others… your heart always care for others… Your hands are never empty… your ocean of feelings for others is never going to dry… so you are never empty handed….
wonderful as ever my dearie…..i completely agree with prateek that you are one amongst the very few who has this quality to proffer crystal clear thoughts through your writings…..i am soooooooooo very proud of you…..
Hi Dear Pritts…thts my pleasure to read you…and ‘have those grey cells ignited over and over again… and Babboo Bebboo thnx to you for giving a patient reading… 🙂
thanks very much Dushyant.. once again you have shown me light through this tunnels of poetry..
thanks BB. for coming and reading this piece.. of course Prateek is just plain wonderful at reviewing the whole thing and adding another new dimension to it..
Mini.. i am just plain overwhelmed.. thank you dearie!
well, am not sure…i wanna add something ,endorse the feeling or thoughts think beyond…can only say…technically speaking u r a flywheel, a capacitor bank and an radio active element..always emitted power and energy….godbless and may ur tribe increase…
thanks very much Anish.. i accept being a a flywheel, capacitor, a radio active element, a catalyst…,. anything you name me.. :-)))))