I care!

Nov 26, 2010 | Creative Writing

I care…

a word of caution
an act of passion
could never go hand in hand
so we arrive and leave this world behind
I pick up those flowers and freeze their fragrance
I chose to ignore what might become
I transcend through conscious decisions
I ignore hearts filled of intoxications
I pick up a path while yet in sleep
eyes smarting from too much of love
emotions drowning in their own deep oceans
every single word writ large on my mind
it calls out and whispers your name
words that spread far and wide
words move with a gladiator’s pride
riding on wings of soft murmurs
I hide behind my own shadows!

7 Comments

  1. prateek
    prateek on 27th November 2010 at 9:35 am

    …Hi Dear Pritts…this poetry is … simply put… amazing and great. This hovers over the subtilities of our awareness at all levels…that cautious decision, that interplay of passion and every other thing in turn interspersed with the ultimate cue that the discerning get from the wakeful state of conscious sleep. You have explained all d facets of Freudian hypothesis so nicely that it is like working upon art with scientific precision…

    ‘…words that spread far and wide
    words move with a gladiator’s pride…’ gives a new metaphor…love that love…

    …and there goes the crescendo where we willfully give into the call from the virtual world of super realism or the surrealism…and become more amenable to the call from this wilderness of subconsciouness… where we are comfortable even if we hide behind our own shadows …shadows of our dreams which get as real as the real world…if not more…

    ‘ hope I have been able to get some of the essence you intended….over to you…Thanks Pritts…

  2. pritpal
    pritpal on 27th November 2010 at 10:02 am

    thanks a lot Prateek for your encouraging words.

  3. pritpalkaur
    pritpalkaur on 5th December 2010 at 10:29 am

    sure.. dear.. will love to hear more from you about your reactions.. thanks very much for bookmarking it!

  4. arvind bhatt
    arvind bhatt on 6th December 2010 at 12:54 pm

    wow it is great .it is a trasure of poem ….it will take time to read all .i will read all first than i will comment till than all the best and thanks

  5. pritpalkaur
    pritpalkaur on 6th December 2010 at 1:06 pm

    sure Arvind ji.. I will look forward to that..

  6. pritpalkaur
    pritpalkaur on 9th December 2010 at 2:58 pm

    thanks a lot.. Maria.. for visiting here and reading.. will look forward to more visits from you dear..

  7. pritpalkaur
    pritpalkaur on 11th December 2010 at 10:36 am

    thanks dear.. and thanks to your cousin Maria too..